miércoles, 16 de mayo de 2012

It was a trip I will never forget

       It was a trip I will never forget on a hot afternoon of january, an amazing journey down from Salta to Brazil. I was travelling with my sister by plane because we had won a travell to Rio de Janeiro for 3 days on a tv programme.
       We had never been at Rio before and it was an amazing experience.It is a huge city  with extensive beaches that we really enjoyed and we also went on shopping in the city centre, we were delighted of being  in that city of dreams.

       Later  this week the trip arrived to its end and we were on the plane to go back to our country, but about 5 minutes after the plane took off, we were told that it was going to go back. Because someone on the airport had started to shout that this plane would crash, so security people thought that perhaps  there was a bomb. We never believed it but some people did and they were really nervous and provoking panic atmosphere.It was only a simple gossip or joke that made our journey longer but after 2 hours we finally travelled and the man at the airport was arrested.

3 comentarios:

  1. cool but
    what would have happened if the bomb was real?
    poor man he only wanted to call the attention
    I like your story :)

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  2. Good story.Excellent organization.
    two suggestions: the first sentence in paragraph three it's TOO long. Why don't you try using commas or just separating it in two parts?
    Include a picture (at least) to make your writing more attractive.

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  3. great improvement! you've got a 9. excellent job!

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